The caveman’s bedtime story

Once upon a time, there was a girl who lived with her parents and brothers in a cave. She was brave and strong, and also filled with curiosity. One day she journeyed far away from her cave following the trail of a wild beautiful animal that she’s never seen before. Her curiosity is so blinding that she’s forgotten about the time. When she look up upon the sky, she saw the sun had almost disappeared into the western sky, so she decided to ran back to her cave. But before she know it, the sun had completely disappeared and there was no moon that night, darkness is all there were. She can’t find her way home, but she notice something else that is so beautiful, the sky, the clear night sky full of stars. So beautiful that she thought she might just lay there and sleep through the night despite the cold that is filling her world. And suddenly, a wild dinosaur appeared and it attacked the strong brave girl. And she died.

And everybody died.

The story above is inspired by the movie “The Croods”

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4 responses to “The caveman’s bedtime story

  • vicbriggs

    Liked the premise, but it all ends too abruptly. I want to see her fight for her life, even if she looses out in the end. And how about it, if she manages to get away from the dino, but then gets so overconfident that on her way back pays no attention to the road and falls into the very bear trap her mother had warned her about? ๐Ÿ™‚ More please

    • Phelios Cyros

      I truly sorry that it has disappointed you somehow. And I have to admit that, your suggested ending is much more “surprising” than mine and will also be a better story.

      If you’ve seen “The Croods”, I believe that you will understand what I’m trying to achieve here. The father in that movie like to tell this kind of short bedtime stories that everybody dies in the end. His objective is to always keep her daughter safe and close to him. Yeah, you should checkout the movie if you haven’t done so.

      How about writing your version of the ending into your blog instead? I would love to read that ๐Ÿ™‚

  • Rutabaga the Mercenary Researcher

    hee hee – reading this thinking “this sounds like The Croods” ๐Ÿ™‚ but I like the dinosaur ending.

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